Is this NOT a Writer/Editor’s Nightmare (Quick post)

This is a sentence from the insurance book:

 

“‘Basic property insurance’ means insurance against direct loss to real or tangible personal property at a fixed location from perils insured under the standard fire policy and extended coverage endorsement and vandalism and malicious mischief and such other insurance coverages as may be added with respect to such property by the industry placement facility with the approval of the commissioner or by the commissioner, but shall not include insurance on automobile or farm risks.”

 

WHY IS THIS SENTENCE, THIS ONE, SINGLE SENTENCE, SEVENTY-FOUR WORDS LONG??????? WTFLIP!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! HOW AM I SUPPOSED TO RETAIN A SEVENTY-FOUR WORDS LONG SENTENCE????? CAN YOU BREAK THAT UP SOME???? YOU CAN’T EVEN ADD A SEMI-COLON????? WHAT IS THIS?????? I’M GOING TO NEED YOU TO DO BETTER!!!!! SEVENTY-FOUR WORDS LONG….FAIL….FRIGGIN GRAMMAR FAIL!

 

 

 

……smh…That is all…..

Miniature Writing Break…

Hey WordPress,

How are you? I haven’t posted anything for about two weeks now…been studying for an insurance test to become an agent, so I just took today off and decided to update my blog.

With everything going on, I haven’t had the drive to write. That and the fact that I think the editing part burned me out some. =/

I’m just so excited. The Passover of the New Covenant that 1st & 2nd Coming Christ established falls on my birthday- March 25th!!!! woop woop! With all the craziness going on, the Passover is DEFINITELY welcomed. Have you guys been keeping up with the news? I usually do, but I haven’t. Well, I went on a news spree, if you will, today and oh boy, things are getting INSANE! I haven’t the slightest idea as to when the world will end, but I can tell we’re close. Even the scientists are saying things are coming to an end. It’s bananas, b-a-n-a-n-a-s.

Take a look at the video link I posted- (2013 Events)- kinda sums up what’s been happening since ’13 started. AND THEN N. Korea is still off their rocker….even moreso now.  They’ve made a pact w Iran, declared they’re ready for an all out war…..boy oh boy! (here is an article about it)

BUT….there’s the Passover, the only way Jesus Himself said you can receive eternal life AND protection. BEST BELIEVE I am ready for the 25th and not just because I’m turning 25. I need some extra protection from this crazy world. How much does the PO (don’t feel like writing the whole word out…..needless to say, this explanation took longer than it would have to just spell out Passover) protect you? You remember the crazy who was shooting in Colorado last yr? Some of the brothers and sisters from my church (World Mission Society Church of God- the ONLY church in the WHOLE ENTIRE WORLD keeping PO of the new covenant EXACTLY how Christ did= only place to receive eternal life and protection) were preaching in that mall. WELL, mr cray cray SHOT TWICE SIX FEET AWAY AT ONE OF MY SISTERS….you know what happened to her? THERE WAS A BULLET HOLE IN HER JACKET BUT SHE WASN’T SHOT- THE TWO PEOPLE BEHIND HER GOT SHOT. I don’t think you heard me- THE TWO BULLETS THAT WERE FOR HER DID NOT TOUCH HER AT ALL. THEY HIT THE TWO PEOPLE BEHIND HER, EVEN THOUGH SHE HAS THE BULLET HOLES IN HER JACKET. Why didn’t it hit her and hit the two behind her. BECAUSE THE TWO PEOPLE BEHIND HER HAVE NEVER TAKEN THE PASSOVER BUT SHE HAS!!!!!!!!! They are dead. Do you hear me? DEAD. Why?

Think about the PO of the Old Testament. Never read it? Ever seen the Prince of Egypt? WELL, every time Moses would go to Ramases (please forgive my spelling) and ask him to let God’s people go, Ramases would say no and a plague would hit Egypt but the Israelites were ok. Finally, God told Moses about the plague of the 1st born- every first born male, person or animal, would DIE unless they kept what? The PO. If they kept the PO, whether Israelite or not, they would be protected. And what happened? Exactly what God said. In the words of Gangstaliscious from the Boondocks “God is Gangsta.” lmbo. (Dang, if my race wasn’t exposed, I think I just exposed it. lol)

“But Tori,” you say. “That was the old testament. That has nothing to do with us now.”

Matthew 5:17- “Do not think that I have come to abolish the Law or the Prophets; I have not come to abolish them but to fulfill them.

That’s what Jesus said, by the way.

So what does that mean? Means that the PO wasn’t abolished like most Christians think. It was changed into the new covenant.

Luke 22:15-20- And he said to them, “I have eagerly desired to eat this Passover with you before I suffer”…And he took bread, gave thanks and broke it, and gave it to them, saying, “This is my body given for you; do this in remembrance of me.” In the same way, after the supper he took the cup, saying, “This cup is the new covenant in my blood, which is poured out for you.

=PO of the new covenant Where is it now? Read my post (Lent & Easter…What Do You Think?) about all this in detail.

Anyway….the PO of the new covenant has been brought back. Why?

Revelation 7:1-3- After this I saw four angels standing at the four corners of the earth, holding back the four winds of the earth to prevent any wind from blowing on the land or on the sea or on any tree. Then I saw another angel coming up from the east, having the seal of the living God. He called out in a loud voice to the four angels who had been given power to harm the land and the sea: “Do not harm the land or the sea or the trees until we put a seal on the foreheads of the servants of our God.”

In the last days, there will be these disastrous winds that will harm the earth. No one is protected unless this angel brings the seal of God. What is the seal and who is the angel?

John 6:27- Do not work for food that spoils, but for food that endures to eternal life, which the Son of Man will give you. For on him God the Father has placed his seal of approval.”

Son of Man= Jesus. Jesus Himself has the seal of God. How do we get it then and what IS the seal?

John 6:53-56- Jesus said to them, “Very truly I tell you, unless you eat the flesh of the Son of Man and drink his blood, you have no life in you. Whoever eats my flesh and drinks my blood has eternal life, and I will raise them up at the last day.  For my flesh is real food and my blood is real drink.  Whoever eats my flesh and drinks my blood remains in me, and I in them.

Jesus has seal- if we eat His flesh and blood, what do we have? The seal! Again, WHAT IS THE SEAL OF GOD???

Hold your horses…I will tell you right now.

Matthew 26:26-28- While they were eating, Jesus took bread, and when he had given thanks, he broke it and gave it to his disciples, saying, “Take and eat; this is my body.”  Then he took a cup, and when he had given thanks, he gave it to them, saying, “Drink from it, all of you.  This is my blood of the covenant, which is poured out for many for the forgiveness of sins.

THE SEAL OF GOD IS THE PASSOVER OF THE NEW COVENANT- THE ONLY WAY TO EAT JESUS’ FLESH AND DRINK HIS BLOOD.

Am I excited about the Passover this year, March 25th? You better believe it. And you all would be BANANAS, B-A-N-A-N-A-S if you didn’t want to take it, too. I judge no one because I am not God, but I believe in Him and if He says “Unless you eat My flesh and drink My blood, you have no life in you,” I say “amen” and obey.

Def of Unless: Except on the condition that; except under the circumstances that; Except for; except; except under the circumstances that; except on the condition that

ummmmmm…….again, Idk about you guys but er, um……if God tells me unless I do something, I cannot go to heaven, you better believe I will be doing WHATEVER He wants me to do. If He said jump up and down on one leg and say “I’m the banana king” (Charlie the Unicorn reference), then conglabbit, I AM THE BANANA KING! In the same way, God said to eat His flesh and drink His blood, not through communion and all that FAKE, NON-BIBLICAL stuff, but through AND ONLY THROUGH the Passover.

So I will be in Zion, God’s dwelling place, keeping the Passover on March 25th, according to the sacred calendar, with God’s true children. Where will you be? I hope at the right place, receiving salvation….

Please, contact your local World Mission Society Church of God to get in on this eternal life. Tomorrow is not promised- take your salvation SERIOUSLY!

On another note…I will be writing chapter 7-10 probably after the Passover, so I may not post anything on here until then either on account of this insurance test. MIND YOU….it is a writer’s nightmare; all these run-on sentences are KILLING ME SOFTLY……oye….

Ok, my fingers are starting to cramp. Lol. Questions, comments, concerns, hit me up. I am always open for a HEALTHY conversation. =)

May God Bless You ALL!

Tori

That Word, “That,” is Used THAT Many Times…

Hello there,

I should be sleeping, as it is the Sabbath tomorrow. No, I am not Jewish. I am Christian. No, I am not a Seventh Day Adventist. I am non-denominational. I digress…

Instead, I am watching Titanic for the eighty bagillion time since it came out when I was 12 and finishing up the last few edits for chapter one. =/ go figure…What I’m realizing though is how many times I use my go to word- that. (funny enough, as I typed “that,” Ms. Dion said “I believe THAT the heart does go on…” I LOVE THIS MOVIE!!! like really, im obsessed!) That is my most overused word. That…haha…and “knew/know” and “thought/think.”

This is so much dang work, but I am loving it. This is the life I want to live- I WANT to be a published author. I WANT to know that I know what I’m doing. I WANT to be able to not just be a writer, but an editor as well. This is sooooooooooo daunting, but it will feel good when I turn in a nicely written book. Who wants to sound like an idiot in front of people? Surely not I.

Speaking of surely, those adverbs are a KILLER. I didn’t realize how many of those I use, either.

Boo…I am using Pro Writing Aid and the website is being silly. Doesn’t it know it is the holy Sabbath day tomorrow and I have to go to bed like an hour ago? Rude….

I’m so happy this first chapter is about to be done. Sunday I will use to do chapter two. Since I have more of a hang of what I’m doing, I am hoping and praying that I can finish it the same day. This turn around needs to be quicker. The sooner I can finish it, the sooner I can start writing again. Or I might just do chapter seven before editing chapter two. Not sure.

Anyway, I need to also start networking on here and twitter more. I’ve been learning a lot from the people I have been networking with. =) Everyone seems to be so nice on here. Don’t be surprised if I randomly drop by your blogs!

Well alrighty…the website is up again and I really do need to go to sleep in the next 15min.

Good night everyone! Have a blessed night!

May God Bless You All!

Tori

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Drowning in Editing

Hey WordPress Family,

I am editing chapters 1-6 right now and I really feel like I’m drowning in editing it. It’s like my golly, I now understand why some people prefer math over English…Not that I EVER will. lol. But really, this is just a lot to take in. As someone who enjoyed the social part of school but not school itself, a lot of these rules are either new to me or I have just completely forgotten them or my school simply didn’t teach this much. Either way, I feel like it’s taking forever just to edit ONE chapter completely. geez…

AND I HAVE THE FLU!!!!

But, I’m alive and I know true God….I think I’ll be ok.

Layla has been itching for me to write what she told me to write, but she has to wait. Who knows how long she will be patient with me. I think I will change her ex-boyfriend’s name, though. He has the same name as my ex (Michael) and I don’t think about him, even when I’m writing about Layla’s ex but last night, I had a dream about him. Granted, I was in a benedryl stupor, lol, but still. It disturbed me. So yeah, I need to think of a new name….the name Curtis is jumping out at me….lol. Layla just agreed in my head. I wish she would be quiet and mind her business. Welp, Curtis it is.

I hope everyone is staying healthy and for all those getting sick or who are sick, I feel your pain and get well!!!!

May God Bless You All!

Tori

Cover For My Book

Hey guys….

So it’s 3:31am and im still up, reading others’ blogs and trying to get my network on when the cover of my book hit me. do you know what the problem is? I CAN’T DRAW FOR CRAP!!!! like really, it’s so bad, it’s laughable. I’m just thankful to God that I have two bffs that can draw really well. I don’t want them to see it, though. they will laugh…they will laugh long and hard….and they probably won’t stop laughing for awhile. but hey, i laughed at it. lol.

The more thought i put into this book, the more excited im getting. but my problem is i don’t focus on one part at a time. i like to see the whole thing laid out: what is the entire book about? how am i going to publish? should i self publish? how much will it cost?…..all these things that distract me from the main thing- writing!

Ok, ok….i need to be going to bed soon. good night guys! =)

May God Bless You!

Tori

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Happy New Years…..Almost Three Months Later

Hi WordPress family!

Happy new years!!!

I know…it’s been quite some time since I’ve chatted with you guys. I’ve just been so swamped with STILL trying to find a job, moving back in with my mom, and trying to fight this God awful cold/flu that everyone and their zebra is getting.

Only very recently have I started writing again. I think it was a great thing for me to take a break. I’ve, also, been looking up grammatical rules and such so I can edit the finished six chapters. The problem is that Layla (the main character) keeps whispering to me that she wants to do something else when I have clearly told her she’s doing it another way. She and I haven’t been seeing eye to eye on certain things but because she’s such a dang diva, I give in. Therefore, the story continues to change. I am also getting overwhelmed with all the rules of english. sheesh. All these technical names for grammar rules I either never knew, didn’t care, or have forgotten. It’s kind of discouraging when all I want to do is write but the editor inside me won’t move on. Is this a common thing or is this just me?

You know, I hear author’s like Laurell K Hamilton saying that her and Merry (Merry Gentry series) often argue and now I can see why. Layla and I were super tight in the very beginning but now she keeps changing her mind. Fickle little thing she is.

Anyway, I hope to write more. I am 90% sure I want to go the self publishing route because the traditional route can take up to two years. yikes! I just found this website called Author Agency (http://www.authoragency.com/) and so far so good. They will find you an agent, if you want to go the traditional route, or they do self publishing. It seems pretty nifty. I will check it out some more before making a final decision. What it really boils down to is the fact that I am unemployed, so I don’t have money to spend like that. -_- it’s rather depressing.

Okie dokie. Well, I wanted to say hi and touch bases with you guys! I’ve missed posting and readers others’ posts, so I will def start doing that more.

Good night and God’s Blessings!

Tori

 

Writing and Stress- Not a Bad Combo

Hey all!

 

So I finally finished the 4th chapter- something I’ve been working on for like 3 days. I would either get too sleepy to write or I just wouldn’t have anything to say. But honestly, I’ve been so stressed out over my financial situation that when I do write, I get lost in it, just like if I was reading a book. I’m fasting and praying, hoping and believing that things will work out by tomorrow (rent day). >_<

 

I have never been through this kind of hardship before, you know. It’s just so….much. So much. I am barely coping honestly. But thank God I have been writing because when I actually do, I find myself completely engrossed in it.

 

Engrossed….that’s a word I feel I should use in chapter 5. I will make a point to do so.

 

Sigh….I’m trying to put all my trust and faith in God, you know? I don’t know what anyone else’s beliefs are, but from the Bible and science, we can understand we’re living in the last days. Therefore, I know Satan is just pissy that his time is short so he’s messing with me…it’s quite irritating, let me tell you. But if he’s anything at all, he’s consistent…I’ll give him that…the bastard…

 

Anyway, other than my life crumpling around me, I’m becoming very proud of my book. Actually because of all the pain going on in my life, it allowed me to write an extremely dramatic scene to end chapter 4. I’m pretty excited for my team (aka my HS besties) to read it and let me know what I should add or take away.

 

I hope everyone else’s life is doing better than mine. =) Though misery loves company, I do pray for everyone to be doing better than I am. Through your good fortune that God blesses you with, I can be encouraged. I love you all!

 

May God Bless You!

Tori